Sunday, July 31, 2011

Lost

Lost

I weed my way across the desert
footstep after dragging footstep
hisses and rattles pierce my ears
sprout fear in my nervous heart
vision of a fortress appears distant
hope revives I struggle onward
unseen holy voices jangle nerves
do they signal death or life
image of the fortress splinters

This poem was written for The Sunday Whirl.

9 comments:

  1. You create a vivid desert scene of despair. I had hope, until the last line. Darn it. :) Thanks for joining us at the Whirl, Willow.

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  2. Your poem has a feeling of desperation...well crafted to prompt!

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  3. scary lost whirl of poem.

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  4. A desert, mirage and a doomed feeling!! Great write very graphic descriptions!!
    Nanka

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  5. Another Wow poem, Willow. Wonderful!! Love the desert images.

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  6. Excellent wordle picture of a person seeking the living water of hope and meaning in a desert life.

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  7. Whew, Willow, this is intense. I felt I was trudging along with you and felt crushed when the fortress splintered. In my mind, the poem continues with an oasis of life that is not a mirage.

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  8. This is so full of emotion for me. I love it. The disparity in life is so evident.

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