Sunday, October 16, 2011

Revolting

My feet dancing through the hoops of your chicanery
heart broken I bolt from sight, wade in shallows alone

Once we had it all, burst on the scene fighting for causes
people gathered and cheered as you promised everything

You were a fake, a fraud, you only wanted worship
your world topples, they shoulder you out with disdain

I can never forgive you, nor can they, your loyal followers
we risked everything for you, now we are outcast



from the challenges for Sunday Whirl

http://www.blenza.com/linkies/links.php?owner=brendaw&postid=16Oct2011

12 comments:

  1. Wow! The political gets personal or other?

    Also, Willow, as a fellow Tree-Hugger,
    Thanks for commenting on my Sunday Tree last week. I’ve posted a new ‘Tree’ and would like to invite you to write something in response to it – or to one of the earlier tress. The post can be found here:
    http://writteninexile.blogspot.com/2011/10/sunday-trees-experimental-tree.html
    Best wishes, Isabel

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  2. Some bitter threads of political emotion are running through this poetic tale! Fascinating!

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  3. Excellent, Willow! So much to think about here. You did a seamless job of 'wordling.'

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  4. Love this, your poetic tale of betrayal. Beautifully crafted. penny

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  5. Your use of the wordle words was sheer mastery!

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  6. I thought this could be either political or personal - excellent response:-)

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  7. Terrific poem, Willow, whether describing a political betrayal or a personal one. The title's double meaning is especially effective.

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  8. Excellent write! The piece pulled me through it with intensity. Its angry tone shines through its voice. You are rocking these wordles!

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  9. Willow, this seems to be a universal truth!

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  10. sad, heartfelt words, well done.

    http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/11/agreement-for-thursday-poets-rally-week.html

    invite you to join poets rally week 55 today.

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  11. Such a riveting narrative poem. I get different meanings when I reread.

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