Saturday, October 8, 2011


Rambunctious ones
I reflect on swallows
admire their dip and glide
sumpting on mosquitos
ballroom dancing
they trip over the pond
obsolete with pesticides

Sunday whirl: rambunctious, admire, swallows, pond, ballroom, obsolete


  1. Oh, how I love that word sumpting. I shall use it after a sumpt of chocolate!

  2. good weaving of the poem through the selective words :) liked it!

  3. Ha! I just commented about swallows dancing on Peggy's offering, and here is yet another glimpse of their flight/dance. The darkness at the end is sadly true. And I thank you for using the word sumpting...'tis a grand introduction for me. It may find it's way into one of my pieces, I love learning new words.

    Thank you Willow. Concise, lovely, and dark. What a great combo. :) I love this piece.

  4. Like Brenda, I really like the word 'sumpting.' And ah, the swallows have their own very fine style of ballroom dancing, don't they?

  5. Another concise write. I don't know how you do it.

  6. Oooh, I join the rest in like the word 'sumpting' you used the words well. :-)

  7. I love what you have done with the wordle words. Less is definitely more here! This is a wonderful short poem.

  8. I love this image of the swallows in their ballet of flight and then the stunning burst of reality at the end.