Sunday, September 25, 2011

Outside

Outside


Motion outside my window
passers-by strolling shop
occasionally they look
meet one another's gaze
it is always an accident
as they lower their eyes

outside my window they
jostle strangers oblivious
to all but themselves
they clutch their security
chat with their friends
never move across lines

8 comments:

  1. Some mystery in this Belle, but speaks to of a universal aloneness. Good take on the wordle!

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  2. I like this very much, Willow. It seems people really hesitate to look one another in the eye, and yes...everyone has lines.

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  3. Interesting one, Willow. You set the scene so well.

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  4. So true. Everyone really moves about in their own little bubble -- even more so now that most people seem to be glued to their smart phones. You captured this very well and succinctly.

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  5. Great observational piece. I can see the scene you describe perfectly.

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  6. Nice use of the wordle words. I especially liked....

    "they clutch their security
    chat with their friends
    never move across lines"

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  7. Great job painting the scene for us. You've given us just enough to set the wheels of imagination in motion. Whole stories could be woven from this poem.

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  8. Such a poignant commentary on the social scene, Willow. As usual, you are spot on!

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