Perhaps I carry grief in secret in the marrow of my hips in stillness I hear the clatter out the window crocuses strewn colors as if by hand flower from brilliance perhaps
Willow, this is good! I liked the 'perhaps' ending, as if it is still a bit questionable! This is, I think, my favorite of wordle poems you have written.
This is good Willow. I gave it several reads, and my impressions changed a bit each time. Lovely phrasing.
ReplyDeleteSo much said in so few words. I agree with Brenda, a lovely write.
ReplyDeleteAdd my similar sentiments to the above, Willow. Concise and expressive.
DeleteWillow, this is good! I liked the 'perhaps' ending, as if it is still a bit questionable! This is, I think, my favorite of wordle poems you have written.
ReplyDeleteI do like that "brilliance perhaps" ending.
ReplyDeleteI love the way its so small yet so captivating :) hatts off!
ReplyDeleteGood write of the wordle! I do love to see where the words take people.
ReplyDeleteThat secret grief is so painful!
ReplyDeleteNice to see your work on your blog, Willow. I miss it when it's not here/ Wonderful to see you are a Wordler"
ReplyDeleteI'm so surprised you got them all to fit with so little extra of your own words. Amazing really! Very good writing!!
ReplyDeleteexcellent and concise use of the words. Very good.
ReplyDeleteYour piece carries hopefulness... carefully. Visiting from Sunday Whirl and look forward to seeing you next week.
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DeleteI'm having trouble posting my comment, so I'm adding it here. My apologies.
This is a brilliant use of the wordle words: crisp, to the point and so expressive!
Superb!
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