Sunday, June 3, 2012

Scrap

He would beat the crap out of me
split my lip, black my eye, bruise
my face as I would crumple
after getting in a few good blows 

I would hammer his torso, gloves
on, edge in, crouch, draw back
burst, pierce, chisel away at the
resistance to my happy freedom

I would crash through him and
glow until the lights went out


for Sunday Whirl Wordl:


12 comments:

  1. Great bit of power in a small package, Willow. Profound imagery.

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  2. Another one! I am absolutely amazed at how many poets used this week's Wordle words to describe/explore physical violence. It never occurred to me!

    Half a Whirl

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  3. Oh, wow. Intense... and I like how the words feel like punches being thrown.

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  4. You have really written an intense piece here, Willow. I would not want to be either one of these two who are fighting it out!

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  5. This is incredible and powerful. I get different meanings each time I read.

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  6. Powerful is exactly the right word. I feel like crouching in a corner myself at the beginning, and then I feel the power of fighting back--"until the lights went out." What a great ending!

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  7. Powerful literally and metaphorically.

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  8. Very intense and I can see the action. I like the surprise at the end with the lights going out.

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  9. Oh my goodness. This is is intense and powerful. I love your harsh opening "he would beat the crap out of me" ... such appropriate wording in this case.

    Your closing is fantastic. For a second I thought you meant the actual lights, but you were just saying thought you fought hard until you blacked out. Eventually, he got the best of you. This has been a common theme with this week's words, and yours is at the top. Wonderful work, Willow.

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  10. You really captured the essence of a dangerous situation with this poem. So well written!

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  11. Whew, Willow! This is an incredible piece of writing. Like Judy said, I get something different from it each time I read it, and I truly have read it over and over. Excellent work, Willow.

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