Monday, June 27, 2011

Bad Date

for wordl prompts: kisses, pepper, sands, grace, copper, flitting, shade, silent, surface, haze, inhaling, whirl


Bad Date

Shape of his mouth
flitting over mine
pepper kisses
smother me
I fight for air inhaling
silent in the shade
copper color sands
whirl as I surface
in haze no grace
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9 comments:

  1. Isabel DoyleJune 28, 2011 at 5:43 AM

    nice use of the words - hope its not too autobiographical

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  2. MaryJune 28, 2011 at 6:24 AM

    I love this poem, Willow, but it makes me feel like I am suffocating. LOL.

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  3. AnonymousJune 28, 2011 at 9:26 AM

    Cross his name off your list. LOL
    Well written piece. Welcome to The Sunday Whirl. I hope you play again.
    ~Brenda

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  4. dkJune 28, 2011 at 3:15 PM

    Such a vampire!

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  5. AnonymousJune 29, 2011 at 2:35 AM

    I feel quite suffocated. Nicely done!

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  6. Judy RoneyJune 29, 2011 at 4:48 PM

    I've had these suffocating kisses (barely remembered until I read this).

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  7. LynneJuly 2, 2011 at 9:10 PM

    Brought back a long-suppressed memory, Willow, but my memory is laced with his breath of Chivas Regal Scotch.

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  8. Mr. WalkerJuly 10, 2011 at 5:22 PM

    Like the ending of this one: "in haze no grace". Kisses should always have a taste of grace in them. Your use of "pepper" was most appropriate.

    Richard

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  9. PeggyJuly 11, 2011 at 5:24 PM

    It does indeed sound like a bad date. In haze no grace is perfect here. I remember these kinds of dates.

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